PV Gap

Jill Said:

What's a better investment?

We Answered:

you bet ye.

Micheal Said:

Why would immortality be a bad thing?

We Answered:

To answer your question, yes it would be a bad thing. For all of the reasons you named above. Except, you forgot one thing: There would be nothing to look forward to. Most efforts would be fruitless.

James Said:

edit this for me? many commented that it needs better punctuation. i dont see any errors?

We Answered:

As a kid, I was always fascinated with science. No matter how many questions I asked in science class or how many hours I spent reading textbooks, I could never get enough information. I attended the National Science Center Summer Camp, where I spent endless hours observing science exhibits and working with many hands-on activities. It was fun, but it wasn't simply a play-area to me. Instead, this was a newly discovered land of wonder, which included machines that could produce electrical energy using wind, solar, and even human energy. The exhibits demonstrated several concepts and contained experiments relating to magnetic fields, sound waves, electricity, and much more. This new world of science seemed like magic; it all seemed to fit together.

Try to keep everything in past tense, your paragraph uses too many gerunds which are generally a present tense construction.